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 Posted: Sat Oct 24th, 2020 03:27 pm
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John_Sturgill

 

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 Some good stuff here:)

Coming from singing the chorus in my head, consider this:
I wish could shake this bottle
That's got a hold of me
Removing the chains
And I'd be free

It's free flowing and sung with a rise in emotions per line fits nice with the syllable count.

Keep up to good work.
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