|View single post by John_Sturgill|
|Posted: Sat Oct 24th, 2020 03:27 pm||
|Some good stuff here
Coming from singing the chorus in my head, consider this:
I wish could shake this bottle
That's got a hold of me
Removing the chains
And I'd be free
It's free flowing and sung with a rise in emotions per line fits nice with the syllable count.
Keep up to good work.