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 Posted: Mon Sep 28th, 2020 12:04 am
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M.P., I think this is fun. My favorite part is the chorus.

I think these last 2 verses are the weaker parts.

I could try out another >>- maybe taste me another
Bring her home for a night
If she’s too hot to handle >- hot doesn't work for beer, at least at the point when you drink it. I thought maybe spicy
I can put her on ice - If you changed the line above somehow different, then there are many words that rhyme with night.

I’ll bring her home just in case
Or only because
I’m craving the feelings
I can’t get rid of >>- personally this verse just falls short for me.

I think this is worth working on.



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