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 Posted: Thu Sep 24th, 2020 08:01 pm
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Andrea

 

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It's very lovely Ian. It feels soft and has a nice flow.

Just a couple suggestions:

I’m there to show the ships their way >- I'm here...

To jump down there and don’t come back >-..and not come back



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