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 Posted: Sat Aug 22nd, 2020 08:20 pm
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Andrea

 

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The first verse pulled me in. I could totally picture everything happening in the story.

This is my favorite part:
"Saw you at the county fair
Smelled your perfume in the air
Selling kisses for a pricey fee
Spit the straw from between my teeth
Threw all my money on the counter there"

I love the turn around at the end. Guess I should have been ready for that :( Nice write



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