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 Posted: Sat Aug 15th, 2020 03:44 pm
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Great hook line to build a song around.

I love this part the best. I would like to see this repeat. It fits in well with all the verses.

"Some questions don’t have answers
Sometimes truth contains a lie
So I ask myself these questions
What if, what could’ve been, and why"


I agree with RDM and like his suggestion here:
"I don't like this line:
It’s hard erasing want
though the meaning fits. Maybe:
It’s hard erasing could've beens
While thinking someday we just might"

"Maybe we can make love, Beneath a starry sky" feels different than the rest. I would ty to rewrite these 2 lines.



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