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 Posted: Thu Aug 13th, 2020 09:08 pm
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RainbowKeeper



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Ola,

Very good, especially the beginning! I can see you sitting there, drinking and battle demons. I love the „drown in a bottle“ line!
I think you missed an -s- at question don’t have answers and in the next line I’d put a the before truth...makes it sound stronger if you ask me.
When you get closer to the end the strong image from the beginning Fades a little. what’s written is good, but it loses a bit, you maybe have a closer look again.

RK



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