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 Posted: Thu Aug 13th, 2020 02:12 am
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RainbowKeeper



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Hey Owen,
thanks for your kind words and advice.
Search for cooling > Need for cooling. << that’s better
on the roof > on the rooftops<< I’d like to stick to singular here, because I’m talking about MY roof...the place where I „hide“ my soul at. That’s also why I wrote the line „staying inside...“ but I do agree, that the „inside“ line is the weakest.
Fresh water has washed away my fear > Clean water ... << didn’t thought off that word...ty

A flash lights up my single thoughts << I wanted to continue with the weather topic and lightning was just too long for the line. But I wanted to connect with the meta-level of the lyrics, saying that for this moment somehow all my thoughts light up, or become clear to me, realizing that I feel that’s needed to get renewed inside....and yes the next line
„And then I pray to be reborn“ connects here. But you are right I thought about the water, the hard rain that arrive at the inner-self and gives new energy to the roots and cleans out the soul from all the s**t inside, so that something new may be grow.
Maybe that’s just to complicated for a listener/reader...mhhh I’ll think about it.

The A* ending....did that cause I like songs with a „fade out“ in the end, but yeah it’s a not needed part.
Ian



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