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 Posted: Sat Aug 1st, 2020 03:24 pm
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M.P. Dudash



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Charles, I see this one as more pop. Chorus line 2 I don’t care for. I am thinking use commotion as the rhyme. And she’s always causing a commotion? Something along those lines? Not feeling the bridge. I think a change there would help also.



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