View single post by RainyDayMan
 Posted: Fri Jul 31st, 2020 07:34 am
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That's a clever and catchy hook! I like it!
The whole song is good fun and bounces along nicely.

I particularly like the "bridal suite" reference. Perhaps what she was looking for? Lots intimated without needing to be said.

In these two lines:
All the good times they were having
Now that they weren’t part of me

you might switch to the present tense to match the rest of the song. And the "part of me" feels just slightly off. Maybe:
All the good times they are having; or All the good times that they're having
Now that they're not loving me

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