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 Posted: Sat Jul 25th, 2020 07:06 am
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RainyDayMan



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I like the gentle flow of the verses and the rhyming scheme you are using there.

The chorus feels a little light emotionally. I think it might resonate more if there was a little more angst associated with the choices. In your introductory comments you said you were thinking of life changing choices, and that's more the direction I would suggest you lean. The "toss a coin" phrase makes it feel somewhat arbitrary and less meaningful.

I like the last verse and coda, how our final path is ordained for us. Seems a good way to end the song.



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