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 Posted: Sat Jul 18th, 2020 08:12 am
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RainyDayMan



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I don't think you would offend a blind person with your lyric, though it is possible they would say you don't understand the reality of being blind (and who of us with sight could?)

The first line is confronting, but it quickly softens with your explanation: temporarily remove sight to appreciate how wonderful everything truly is.

This line feels a bit insensitive:
Sure some will drown in their self pity
but not drastically so.

You could potentially rewrite this in the 1st person, as in:
blind my eyes so I can see...
It might give it a more intimate feel. And it is harder to offend anyone that way.



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