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 Posted: Wed Jul 15th, 2020 07:24 pm
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RainbowKeeper



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Hey Owen,
I just had a closer look at your feedback.
I have to admit that your right about changing those lines because it’s not only the way they are done but also, in the way you put them, (more) right in the grammar sense. I understand why I did it and why I liked it the way I wrote it. You know it’s a typical problem if you got German as your native language, the if-sentences type III sound so....incorrect for us and when you talk a lot to English speaking ppl you notice that the often don’t care about those rules themselves. Well I’m still caught inbetween...but yeah yours definitely are the better lines. Still have a question about the rainbow line....why did you chose the preposition „of“ there?
Also I’m trying to rephrase the other lines so that the meaning I want to show will be easier to find out.
Thanks again!
Ian



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