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 Posted: Tue Jul 7th, 2020 12:04 pm
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Plastic Believer

 

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RainyDayMan wrote:
I don't feel like the song has found it's core message yet, or if it has, it hasn't come across to me.

The emotion of insecurity comes thru, with that explicit line but also "Take my crown" and "Not my life" and others as well.

But beyond that, I'm not sure how I am supposed to feel about the singer or the situation.

The structure looks sound and very singable so the framework is there.

What is it you want the listener to feel, think or experience having listened to your song?


Thank you for the feedback. At least the structure looks good, I'm a bit rusty!

I think I want to put across that feeling of insecurity that you picked up on, not feeling comfortable in your own skin sort of thing, as for the feeling of the listener, I don't think it's pity just more of an understanding of what the person feels but I will think on that and adjust accordingly.

Thank you again

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