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 Posted: Fri Jul 3rd, 2020 11:44 pm
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ASecretMeaning wrote:
Andrea, I see I can learn a lot from you!

I'm not sure I can add much, but instead of
"You are the kiss on my lips
lunar eclipse"

You could try
You are the kiss on my lips
Poisonous sips"

"Recurring nightmare" you have noted as too many syllables, but depending on the music and the phrasing I think it could work.


Thank you ASM for your positive words! Thanks also for your idea for kiss on the lips. I will keep it as an option. I agree, recurring nightmare could possibly work. I think I will try to keep it.



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