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 Posted: Fri Jul 3rd, 2020 10:16 pm
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ASecretMeaning



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Andrea, I see I can learn a lot from you!

I'm not sure I can add much, but instead of
"You are the kiss on my lips
lunar eclipse"

You could try
You are the kiss on my lips
Poisonous sips"

"Recurring nightmare" you have noted as too many syllables, but depending on the music and the phrasing I think it could work.

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