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|Posted: Fri Jul 3rd, 2020 11:57 am||
|I like the contrasts.
The first one (tears in my eyes) is less so. As I first read it, I took the tears to be from the sun so perhaps a positive thing. Was that intentionally ambiguous?
For me, "twisted" implied "around your finger" so there may be room to explicitly reference that somewhere.
'all my beliefs are now doubts" is a strong line.
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