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 Posted: Wed Jul 1st, 2020 01:01 am
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RainbowKeeper wrote:
Ahh ok I understand that the relationship is still „active“. Mhh you know it’s the strongest line you could have written there but somehow...dunno how to explain it...sorry

The other rhyme-topic: I think you misunderstood me there. It’s more that this line which is different seems to cut out of the frame, that’s why I’d put a line like that in part two too.
And yeah I’d take your first lines and the last 3 parts and work around it with a bridge or something. That would be my idea.


I will hold off on the relationship part, because I actually do not know how this will end yet. Probably not good- lol

The ono -rhyming line if a bit out of synch. I will think on this more. Thank you for your help :)



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