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 Posted: Wed Jul 1st, 2020 12:38 am
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Thank you RK. Yes, you are very helpful. I did intentionally not rhyme on that one line - lol. It may not work out, but I sometimes like a non rhyming ending.

The lips/ eclipse just came to my brain, so I wrote it down. They don't really go together, but I loved eclipse, so I included it.

In the song the "relationship has not ended, so loved doesn't fit. I hope to add a bridge or ending, but haven't gotten there yet.

I doubt I will need as many couplets as I have written, so if some don't work I will eliminate them first. If someone offers me a better idea, I'll use that. So, yes, keep thinking! I will tweak and cut words as needed too. Enjoy, Andrea



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