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 Posted: Sun Jun 14th, 2020 09:49 pm
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Motorist Sketchbook



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Wow. I think this would work pretty much as is.
The sixth block would serve as the chorus throughout.
You need 5 verses and five choruses.

The longest lines could use some editing for length.
And verse 3 needs some attention. Two lines start with the word "A".
And the second line says "A doorways bends".
Should be either "doorway bends" or "doorways bend".

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