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 Posted: Fri Apr 24th, 2020 10:05 am
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RainbowKeeper



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Hello rdm,

Every idea is welcome. And I have to say that the lines you mentioned are definitely the weakest ones in this piece. I wanted to show the connection of being beautiful and useful for us humans, somehow. But while writing it I kept the possibility to rearrange the A+ part and maybe put the lines of A* in as the first 4 lines. But I’m not sure yet.
The c-part can be shortened up. I guess this comes when I sing it after all.
This song became a „conceptual work“ means it’s already hanging on a wall (with a German translation next to it) and 3 paintings made by myself which show the steps of „transformation“. The patients of the office like it a lot.

Cheerio
RK



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