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 Posted: Tue Apr 7th, 2020 12:27 am
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Andrea

 

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Hi Joe, I think you have something special here. Your hook is incredible. If you join the ideas of the first post with this new post, I think it will come together nicely. Some of these line are killers. I think if you can develop the story from verse to verse, then it will come together. The emotion is strong - keep plugging!



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