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 Posted: Sat Apr 4th, 2020 08:41 am
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RainyDayMan



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Good strong structure to your lyric. Feels tight.

I like the images, and especially "Silver spurs and a painted sky" as Charles pointed out.

I can't get a read on the emotion you're going for.

All up it feels like an image seen from a distance more than a story evolving - that's not a criticism, just a comment.



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