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 Posted: Mon Mar 2nd, 2020 01:08 am
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RainbowKeeper



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Hey there,
I find this lyrics very interesting!
Still trying to get all the images out.
Just wanted to say real quick, what made me frown a little:

But ain't nobody listening < maybe I just don’t get it, but somehow it feels a little out of the picture. „Seems nobody is listening“ would make more sense to me. Specially if I combine it with the line before.

strategically < seems to be a very difficult word for a song. While reading I had to start twice to fully get it. So maybe you find a word that is less „complicated“.

That is all from me.
I‘m sure I read it once again, it’s a good piece u have here.

Cheerio



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