|View single post by RainbowKeeper|
|Posted: Fri Feb 28th, 2020 03:00 am||
I like the last version u posted a lot. There it shows, not only because of the quick words chance, a very strong „flow“.
But I know that u like honest feedback and ideas, so here are mine:
I would add -s to the word turbulence (this really annoyed me while reading. Can’t even say why, but somehow...I dunno it feels right to me)
Besides that I d like to give some more ideas. I would think about:
Streaming/waterfalls and maybe a lighthouse.
In the end, all u need to do is give it strong legs the song can stand on. U know like I said there is a lot of confusion in it but I think you need to build a frame around it. I’d like that, but as always: these r just my ideas. I really love what u try to say here and how u do it, cause I know that it comes from the heart and that’s where it SHOULD come from! 😉👍
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