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 Posted: Tue Feb 18th, 2020 05:05 pm
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RainbowKeeper



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Hey,
I like your second one! Even if it also rhymes with back....like my B. Would cause ehhhmmm....3x back after another, if i saw it right.

And if u really want to start with one of your lines, My preference is the first: „do you remember...“ because it shows that there are two ppl involved right from the start. It’s still as if someone tells the story but there ain’t a minor and mayor character in it, and so this would be clear right away.
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