|View single post by RainbowKeeper|
|Posted: Sun Feb 16th, 2020 10:26 pm||
With the greatest respect for you and your work little me wants to give some feedback too.
First of all I really like the chorus and the ending!
What seems to let me frown....is the beginning.
My first line would be „baring our souls“....the stuff u have there before makes it....well „not round“ in my opinion. But to fulfill the whole „message“ I may would keep the line „ when our hearts first entwined“ from the first bit of your song. This may be a good line for a backing vocal in the beginning of the song before the lead vocal starts with: baring our souls.... I think it fits because u bring up that line again later in your lead vocals/lyrics.
Just my opinion but it sounds good in „my inner ear“ 😅
Keep up the good work!
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