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 Posted: Mon Feb 3rd, 2020 09:46 am
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jamestoffee



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Good start. I can see where you are going with the contrast of how man treats God vs. God treats man.

Lyrically, consider swapping the chorus with v3.

Right now you have

V1 bad man
CH bad man
V2 bad man
CH bad man
V3 good God
CH bad man

but since the title is "Love without fail", you can spotlight and highlight the goodness of God like this

V1 bad man
CH good God
V2 bad man
CH good God
V3 bad man
CH good God

Thanks for sharing.

James



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