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 Posted: Fri Nov 15th, 2019 12:59 am
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RainyDayMan



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Great that you're thinking about how this is going to sound and be sung.
That comes through very clearly in how you're writing the lyric.

Some nice lines there like:
Come on tell me the truth now
Make me believe it


but overall it feels like the lyric is a vehicle for the singer to express themselves via the singing rather than the words themselves.
And there's nothing wrong in that! Feels like a good fit for an R&B song.

One to be heard rather than read I think.



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