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 Posted: Mon Nov 4th, 2019 09:59 am
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jamestoffee



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Nice delivery on playing and singing.

I would have liked the voice louder and uke softer. Also, slowing the tempo may add more weight to the bluesy of the song. I like when you did stop chords...maybe that could be done earlier in the song as well for contrast/dynamics.

Lyrically, consider sensory details to draw in the listener.

it's about anxiety & depression more than external factors like losing a job or relationship issues.

I could not understand this from the lyrics themselves. Maybe you could personify the fear/ anxiety & depression.

Thanks for sharing.

James



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