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 Posted: Sat Oct 5th, 2019 11:43 pm
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SongWriterJoe



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WTG John. Great work! "Every single day" might work as "Each and every day" Just a thought. Has a "Gambler" feel to it. (Kenny Rogers)

A nickel's wort of free advice:


The pain she feels from sympathetic looks (Or "looks of sympathy" - very poetic)

Seeing things no boy of nineteen (delete:years) should ever see

To know he('s not returning) never will return

Sweethearts since (middle school) they were kids

Last edited on Sun Oct 6th, 2019 12:13 am by SongWriterJoe



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