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 Posted: Thu Oct 3rd, 2019 06:41 am
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RainyDayMan



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Strong message here, and your familiarity with autistic kids shines through. It feels sympathetic and respectful.

I like your bridge, but the word "unfurled" has more positive connotations than negative ones to me, so doesn't feel quite perfect for what you need.

You might try:
smile or go away > smile and go away



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