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 Posted: Tue Oct 1st, 2019 11:11 pm
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RainyDayMan



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Those opening verses feel much smoother now. The
...A, ...A, ...B
structure flows better. Probably because that was the original inspiration.

In fact I wonder if you should apply that again further down? So maybe:
I can’t imagine life without you
Or the heartache I’d go through
If we tried and failed, but that's just my excuse

Are we better off as friends
I guess that all depends
With a second chance, I know what I would choose
...or more like that.

BTW I like those 2 lines:
Are we better off as friends
I guess that all depends

I think this part might make a good bridge:
The only one to ever scare me...

Then your chorus can stay in the 4 line format for both
You’re the chance I didn’t take...
and
Our yesterday’s have turned to years...



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