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 Posted: Sun Sep 22nd, 2019 10:13 pm
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RainyDayMan



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Nice! I can imagine it working well in that style!

"disappearing" felt a syllable long in line 2, but I can't think of a better alternative, as you use "fade" in line 4 and that would be the only other obvious one.
But in any case, that's a pretty small niggle!



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