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 Posted: Sun Sep 8th, 2019 05:19 pm
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BRD



Joined: Sun Aug 4th, 2019
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Really good nuts and bolts. What I would like to see is some specificity to make it more "real." Since it's driving, maybe include a city in each verse. Maybe a realization that despite his desires to be home with his expecting wife/girlfriend, he's actually getting further away. Put them in Carolina for example, then there is a stop in Nashville. Then a stop in Little Rock. Then Dallas...he wants to be getting closer, but he's getting further and further away. Still, he keeps telling himself that he'll be home soon.

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