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 Posted: Fri Sep 6th, 2019 11:32 am
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Motorist Sketchbook



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I like the concept on this.
Using the word "Shotgun" for the title, in reference to a passenger, or "copilot".

I think the interplay between writer and reader/listener is so important.
To tease the reader/listener to check out your work based on the "bait" of the title.

I recently released lyrics under the title "Orange". Most were surprised by what they found.
Not what they were expecting.

Like telling a joke. A successful punchline relies on a bit of surprise.

I drive deliveries for a living. So, I share the road with the big rigs.
I have a lot respect for what those guys (and gals) do in their work.

And to a smaller degree, I know what it's like to have a ton and a half of cargo in the back.
Especially if you have to stop quickly.

I wonder, is it common for truckers to bring a girlfriend with them? Or is that typically against policy?
Maybe if the are self-employed they can do whatever they like. Not sure.

As I read the lyrics I was trying to figure out if the passenger was a friend, a dog, a girlfriend, or a wife.

I worked through a process of elimination to answer my own question.
Anyway, I think this could use some more work. Perhaps more about the relationship and less about the driving.

The driving part is established fairly quickly. What is the driver remembering that he longs to relive?

- Sketch



Last edited on Fri Sep 6th, 2019 11:34 am by Motorist Sketchbook



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