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 Posted: Sun Sep 1st, 2019 05:18 pm
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LongShadows



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Nice call, Charles, I was tripping over that last line of the chorus, too. Your fix is similar to what I was going to suggest.

Bunny, I love this one. I'm a sucker for the AAB rhyme scheme and you use it well, here.
Also like the bridge a lot. I'm also a sucker for clever rhyming.



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