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 Posted: Sat Aug 24th, 2019 04:38 pm
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Motorist Sketchbook



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Good job RDM. Thanks for posting.

I agree with Andrea. The Bridge really stood out to me.
Interesting to see that Arabic spelling for "Genie".
It gives it a darker reference due to the etymological connection with "Jinn". (demon)

"Bridge:
And the pitcher can't be unbroken
Like your words cant be unspoken
And the djinni won't go back in the bottle again
Oh no"

As I listened, I was waiting for that little extra something
that has been in your music over the last year. But I didn't hear it on this one.
Seems to need a solo, or a change in instrumentation somewhere. ???
And perhaps a stronger turnaround between verses. ???
Those would be my suggestions for improvement.

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