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 Posted: Sat Aug 24th, 2019 04:38 pm
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Motorist Sketchbook

Joined: Sat Apr 28th, 2018
Location: Minneapolis, Minnesota USA
Posts: 1014
Good job RDM. Thanks for posting.

I agree with Andrea. The Bridge really stood out to me.
Interesting to see that Arabic spelling for "Genie".
It gives it a darker reference due to the etymological connection with "Jinn". (demon)

And the pitcher can't be unbroken
Like your words cant be unspoken
And the djinni won't go back in the bottle again
Oh no"

As I listened, I was waiting for that little extra something
that has been in your music over the last year. But I didn't hear it on this one.
Seems to need a solo, or a change in instrumentation somewhere. ???
And perhaps a stronger turnaround between verses. ???
Those would be my suggestions for improvement.


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