View single post by BRD
 Posted: Tue Aug 20th, 2019 01:47 am
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Joined: Sun Aug 4th, 2019
Location: Arkansas USA
Posts: 42
"your wings were ready much to soon
but I'm afraid my heart was not"

Strong, strong lines. Wish I thought of it. It's so strong, it really overshadows the two lines before it. In comparison,
"Can't believe you've gone so quickly
you are everything that I've got"
seems, I don't know, generic? Lines 3 and 4 are so strong, it's going to take a lot of thought, I think, to come up with a great 1st and 2nd line good enough to compliment it. However, that is a great problem to have.

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