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 Posted: Sun Apr 21st, 2019 10:58 pm
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RainyDayMan



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Very interesting!

This may be one where an understanding of the context is important to appreciate the lyric.

I saw your explanation, but I didn't really get that from the lyric. But if I was familiar with the poem or the musical I may not need the explanation!


And sought until his hands were sore
Perhaps it's how you visualize this, but would "feet" fit better here?

With years and days
The "with" feels slightly odd there to me. I would probably use "the".

He hunted for her one night
You might try "each night", even allowing the following events only take place on a specific night.

The chorus has an interesting structure, I can't quite pick the rhythm there. Look forward to hearing it when you have found your vocalist.



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