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 Posted: Tue Mar 5th, 2019 10:00 pm
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 Hi Joe, These lyrics started strong. I loved the first 2 verses and the chorus. For me, it turned when you brought another person into the story(Job). I think you can say the same ideas without adding Job. In my opinion, it would be stronger.

We may not always know God's perfect plan - a good idea for a verse.

One word change suggestion I will make is in verse 2:

'Though I may be tempted to stray from Your way.
I know You're there always for me..
And Your great sacrifice sets my heart and soul free..
It makes me the best I can be."

I am not sure about makes. Maybe shows, or delivers, gives...

Just my ideas, hope they help some :)



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