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 Posted: Wed Feb 13th, 2019 04:38 am
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Kel

 

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Hi MP,

Not sure if you meant it, but I could hear a very distinct Johnny Cash type life lesson in this one.

The only thing for me is it seems to wander around a bit, lacking a reason for paying attention to what is being said.

I suggest pulling this one apart and making it relatable to me, the listener. This is coming off like a teacher saying do what I say, not this is what happened to me, and it could happen to you too.

I really think it will be worth the effort.

Cheers,
Kel

Last edited on Wed Feb 13th, 2019 04:40 am by Kel



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