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 Posted: Sat Jan 12th, 2019 10:07 pm
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RainyDayMan



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Feels solid MP! Good strong hook, and a rollicking sort of story line. One to really sing along with.

I like how at the end you make it personal with:
She had tricks up her sleeves, that she pulled out on me
which is also a strong line of itself

I stumbled rhythmically on that 2nd line. I can't hear what's in your head, so it may be just fine as is, but perhaps:
Found she liked making men feel down > She liked making young men feel down



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