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 Posted: Thu Jan 10th, 2019 12:16 am
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Motorist Sketchbook

Joined: Sat Apr 28th, 2018
Location: Minneapolis, Minnesota USA
Posts: 927
There's a good concept here.
But the lyrics just aren't engaging.
They seem to lack cohesion.
Seems a bit disjointed.

This lacks that magic quality I see in your other work.

You are a good writer.
With more effort you could make this work.
But you'll have to decide whether you want to invest
the time or move on to something else.

Maybe you are facing a happy heartache with these lyrics.

- Sketch

Blue Collar Road Scholar

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