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 Posted: Sun Apr 29th, 2018 08:47 am
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RainyDayMan



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Nice, laidback feeling. Quite an original theme and style which is great. I like the pauses before the "to the end of the world" lines in each verse.

I didn't connect emotionally with the song. Felt more like something you had written for yourself than for others. Nothing wrong with that, if it's the case, as long as it's not intended for commercial purposes.

I don't think the echo/delay on the vocals is helping the track - just making it harder to hear the words. See what other opinions you get on that.

I think your voice suits the song quite well.

The ending felt a bit out of place to me, like it didn't logically flow from what came before. Makes me wonder whether there is more to this in your head than made it down on paper.



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