|View single post by RainyDayMan|
|Posted: Fri Oct 20th, 2017 09:36 pm||
|Nice! Good to see a happy song.
I like your rhyming scheme, but I would also consider using a bridge with a completely different pattern just to break it up a little in the middle and add variety.
I like these lines especially:
I'm all out of luck used it all up
when you said that you'd be mine
starts off like a negative, then turns it right around.